American Dream ( Obama's Speech)

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yet words on a parchment would not be enough to deliver slaves from bondage, or provide men and women of every color and creed their full rights and obligations as citizens of the United States. What would be needed were Americans in successive generations who were willing to do their part- through protests and struggle, on the streets and in the courts, through a civil war and civil disobedience and always at great risk - to narrow that gap between the promise of our ideals and the reality of their time. This was one of the tasks we set forth at the beginning of this campaign - to continue the long march of those who came before us, a march for a more just, more equal, more free, more caring and more prosperous America. I chose to run for the presidency at this moment in history because I believe deeply that we cannot solve the challenges of our time unless we solve them together unless we perfect our union by understanding that we may have different stories, but we hold common hopes; that we may not look the same and we may not have come from the same place, but we all want to move in the same direction - towards a better future for our children and our grandchildren. This belief comes from my unyielding faith in the decency and generosity of the American people. But it also comes from my own American story. I am the son of a black man from Kenya and a white woman from Kansas. [...] 35 I am married to a black American who carries within her the blood of slaves and slave owners - an inheritance we pass on to our two precious daughters. I have brothers, sisters, nieces, nephews, uncles and cousins, of every race and every hue, scattered across three continents, and for as long as I live, I will never forget that in no other country on Earth is my story even possible. 40 27.10.20 Laura It's a story that hasn't made me the most conventional candidate. But it is a story that has seared into my genetic makeup the idea that this nation is more than the sum of its parts-that out of many, we are truly one. [...] Source: http://www.nytimes.com/2008/03/18/us/politics/18text-obama.html (563 words) Annotations: 9 original sin = (religious belief) that man has a tendency to be evil from birth; 10 stalemate = Stillstand; 16 parchment = here: an old document; 17 creed = here: Glauben 32 unyielding = unnachgiebig; 37 hue = shade of colour; 40 to sear= to be burned into the surface of sth.; Assignments: 1) Point out what Barack Obama says about his motivation for running for presidency, taking his own American story and the significance of the Constitution into account. (comprehension - 12 points) 2) Analyze the language and the rhetorical devices which Obama uses to support his arguments and to make his speech effective. (analysis - 20 points) Good luck!!! 3) In his speech Obama states that he fights for a "more just, more equal, more free (...) America" (I. 25). Comment on the question whether Obama's dream has come true today. Include background knowledge acquired in the English lesson about the past and the present situation of African Americans. (comment - 16 points) Klausurtal 3 Assignment A his gave Barack Obama nomination speech on March 18 in 2008 in Philadelphia. The speech deals with his motivation and story why he wants to be the next. president of America. His motivation is that he wants to change something about America but not alone but together with the american people. Barack Obama knows that slavery is abolished but it is still an important thing for him because it is a part of his story and a part of everyone elses story. He thinks because of the different races in his family he is perfect for the job as president because he knows that all people equal and equal worth." 1st Prof IA (his personal story of...). S.O. -R -Z ~ issue. -Z -R rob (are) Laura 104 words ÍAISE 27.10.20 wan делал? Of course, he does! Z Assignment 2 Barack Obama uses certain rhetorical devices in his speech to make his arguments stronger and more effective. In the beginning of his speech he uses in line two to six a historical image to draw attention to the Oscleration of Independence. and simultaneous to the puritans who do the foundation stone for the rules and rights. Futhermore he uses a historical image in line M,"... least twenty years...." more to relate to Lincoln because he abbolished slavery. Obama uses a quotation, ".. promised its people liberty.. and justice... (1.15) to draw. again attention to the Secleration of Independence to show that the rights and rules: important to him. He also uses a lot of -2- Prop 1 Sr - R 10 (-ly) -R Z -R [] IA (for law and justice) -R - Z Z IG -R So. message? IT/W (laid) → NO! Constitution Nein! rwiso (and) 17 Nein! 16 /60[] TAIGI (give them feeling of ...) a -R -R (Gr (-5) ~ and he emphesize. Independence to emphasize that he really cares (w (equal) about equality and the rights. In the fifth and sixth paragraph he uses@lot of emotive language ~ he IA (even though) [] VSb/w (are) ~ underlines. 1st Z Art [] говата Z -Z personal pronounces like we, us, our" to connect with the audience members and to let them fell togetherness because they a IB2 (these adjetives) are an union. In line 21 be relats again to the Declaration of because Obama wants to show that everyone has his own story but they still all equal and at the same time he wants to underline that he is not more worth just because he is running for presidency. Obama uses a parallelism and enumeration,"... more just, more equal, more free, more caring and more prosperous.." (11. 24-25) to emphasize his plans for America, and he uses it -3- because the audience members should remember this because it is a very important plan. Obama uses a second enumeration, "... brothers, sisters nieces, nephews, uncles and cousins...." (11. 36-37) to underline how different his family is and to show that he loves togetherness and that all american people are like a big family. He uses a alliteration, ".... conventional candidate." (1.40) to underline that he is not like other candidates and that he can understand the audience members because he has his own story, too. At the end of his speech. he uses emotive language again, that out of mạng, we are truly one," to emphasize the fogetherness as an union and so that they remember this sentence, because it is. -U- IS/A (he wants... to remember) vw (plan) 2 110 (diverse) -R R S.O. -R their ~[] ecaus derlin eac 156/A (to make the listeners....) ma c lange vices Argung ectiv ma Am es 옥 D do ac Wiederholung "he use."! 1A (equally important?) everyone is equal worth it. IA 1Bz (?) VOL IT (Says) ~r that 1st IA (the same.... ... as) Saura important because Obama underlines that Barack Obama uses a lot of emotive language and rhetorical devices to support his arguments and make it effective." 329 words Assignment 3. Barack Obama said in his speech he fights for a "more just, more equal, more free (...) America (1. 25). Now is the question; if his dream has come true today? On the one hand his dream has come true. lot a because nowadays a of African Americans have equal rights like the with people. In contrast to the early days African Americans have more high school graduations. and better jobs too. Futhermore, a lot of white people support the African Americans and try to help them to get more equal. In the early days people thought that the rights like life, liberty and the persuit of happiness are just for white people. this way because the of thinking changed because the most people accept nowa- days that all'are created equal. An other point is that African Americans have more chances for education and for sure more opportunities. African Americans can reach everything if they work hard, like withe people. On the other hand Obama's dream has not come true because there is still a lot of discremination against African Americans. First S.O. IA (to get rights?) equal 1 [] -R 1 YW (men) • today N IT (were) -R Wieso? Vas ها Really!? IA (the same an white...). > Vage! Constitution! Nein! -Z 1w (respect) /S6/A IA IA (a racist) Art [J ryes 15t/1 w (become) IWC] 1A (in the an...). шосу No 1. 104 words No 2. 329 words No 3. 280 words 713 words of all there is a lot of police violence against African Americans. For exemple, they get shot although they are innocent, So in that score African Americans do not have the right to life as it is promised in the Declaration of Independere. The second point is that the Ku Klux Klan is still active in America which shows that African Americans still not so important like white people. The third point is that the president at the moment is racial and he does nothing against the discrimination or the police violence. All in all Barack Obama's dream has not completly ause come true becau African Americans are Zu vage 1 still get not treated that Tike white people. way 280 words oberflächlich in der Darstelluny! -7- 1 LK Q1-2020-21 - Erwartungshorizont 2 Bewertung der Klausur von: Inhalt 3 4 Bewertungskriterien Klausurteil A - Hörverstehen (isoliert) (20%) Anforderungen: Die Schülerin / Der Schüler weist durch die Bearbeitung der Teilaufgaben ihr / sein Textverständnis nach. Gesamtpunktzahl Klausurteil A - Hörverstehen 1 Bewertungskriterien Klausurteil B - Leseverstehen mit Schreiben (80%) 2 Laura Teilaufgabe 1 (Comprehension) Anforderung Die Schülerin / Der Schüler schreibt einen Einleitungssatz und benennt: Textart, Redner, Datum, Ort und Thema beschreibt Obamas Motivation, für das Amt des Präsidenten der USA zu kandidieren: Obama is confident that the Americans will grow together one day, regardless of their skin colour He wants to continue fighting for justice, equality, freedom, and prosperity His goal: a better future for the generations of people's children and grandchildren even though people have different backgrounds, skin colours etc. they share this common hope führt an, was Obama über die amerikanische Verfassung sagt: er- max. Punkt- reichte zahl Punkte 30 10 the answer to the question of segregation has been there all along, embedded in the Constitution it promised equality, justice, liberty for everyone, and a union formed by the American people Teilaufgabe 2 (Analysis) Anforderung nevertheless, people did not protect these values by having slaves successive generations had to fight and protest to abolish slavery stellt heraus, inwiefern Obamas eigene amerikanische Geschichte bedeutsam ist: his father is black and from Kenya, his mother from Kansas Obama's wife is black too and a descendant of slaves his other relatives live on three continents and have different skin colours and races this diversity characterizes America Summe 1. Teilaufgabe Die Schülerin / Der Schüler benennt die Intention Obamas, die Zuhörer unter Einbeziehung seiner Herkunft und seiner persönlichen Geschichte davon zu überzeugen, dass er für das Amt des Präsidenten geeignet ist. analysiert die von Obama verwendeten Stilmittel und ihre Wirkung und nennt z.B. Lösungs- qualität max. 2 enumerations: "Farmers and scholars; statesmen and patriots ..." (1.4) → to underline the variety of people who came to seek freedom and equality in the US; "through protests and struggle, on the streets and in the courts, through civil war and civil disobedience" (II. 19-20) to point out how many attempts have already been made to change the situation; 4 3 3 12 4 1 10 2 O 2 n Lösungs- qualität max. 5 1 6 3 2 "I have brothers, sisters, nieces, nephews, uncles and cousins, of every race and every hue scattered across three continents" (1I. 36-37) → to emphasize his multiracial and cosmopolitan family background; anaphora /repetition: "... our Constitution - a Constitution that had... a Constitution that promised..." (II.14-15) to draw attention to the values and beliefs which were outlined in the founding documents; anaphora: "it's a story" (II. 39-40) to make it clear that his biography reflects America's unique diversity and qualifies him to represent its people as President; images: "America's improbable experiment in democracy" (II. 3-4) → to illustrate the courage and the strengths of the founding fathers; "It was stained by this nation's original sin of slavery" (ll. 8-9) → to underline how wrong it was not to abolish slavery in 1787; ... continue the long march of those who came before us" (I.23-24)→ to emphasize that there is still a long way to go; "who carries within her the blood of slaves and slave owners" (1.35) → to prove that an unjust system can be overcome; repetitions: "march" (1.24), "more" (l.24-25), "same" (1.29) to underline common goals; antithesis: "different-common" (II. 27-28)); "black-white" (1.34); "many-one (1.41) to point out that Americans may be very different, yet have a strong bond that unites them; alliteration: "ultimately unfinished" (1. 8) to show that a democracy is work in progress; conventions need to be altered if they are destructive to the people; quotation: (1.1) from the Constitution to remind Americans of the high hopes the founding fathers had for the new nation. analysiert die Sprache, die Obama verwendet - negatively connoted words to show the difficulties of the people who fought for equality: "protests and struggle" (1.19), "civil war" (1.20), "disobedience" (1.20) positively connoted words to show his optimism, e.g.: ideal of equal citizenship" (1.14), "hopes" (1.28), "better future" (1.29); reference to fundamental American beliefs, quoted from the Declaration of Independence and the Constitution, throughout the speech such as "equal", "liberty" justice" "union"; 7 ggf.: erfülit weiteres aufgabenbezogenes Kriterium (4). Summe 2. Teilaufgabe he emphasizes the importance of the people's unity: "solve them together" (11.26-27); "move in the same direction" (1.30): "we are truly one" (1.41); Teilaufgabe 3 (Comment) Anforderung Die Schülerin / Der Schüler geht in der Einleitung auf das Zitat ein und erklärt dieses; erläutert unter Einbeziehung des im Unterricht erworbenen Hintergrundwissens, wie sich die Situation der Menschen, die Minderheiten angehören, im Laufe der Zeit verbessert hat, z.B. - slavery was abolished in 1865; segregation was ended by the Civil Rights Act in 1964; Barack Obama was the first black president from 2008-2016; there are quite a few famous African Americans actors, athletes or musicians who have the chance to live the American Dream; some African Americans have well-paid or even top jobs and are successful in all walks of life (e.g. as teachers, doctors, professors, authors, ...) - high school education is free and available to all women are allowed to vote since 1920 führt Argumente auf, die belegen, dass noch immer nicht alle Menschen gleich behandelt werden und untermauert sie mit Statistiken, z.B. women still earn only three-quarters of the average pay of American men; Native Americans, gays and lesbians are still fighting for freedom and equality the quality of education depends on where a child goes to school and how much money the parents can spend on college education; more African Americans, Native Americans and Latinos live in poverty than Whites; almost 5% of adult males incarcerated and 41% of all people on death row are black; cases of police brutality against African Americans (George Floyd) and shootings of unarmed African American teenagers have sparked massive protests. A new civil 6 2013 6 Lösungs- qualität max. 4 5 2 3 3 4 formuliert auf der Basis seiner Ausführungen ein Fazit, das sich nachvollziehbar und plausibel aus seinen Ausführungen ergibt. 5 ggf.: erfüllt weiteres aufgabenbezogenes Kriterium (4). Summe 3. Teilaufgabe Summe Inhalt Sprache rights movement "Black Lives Matter" demands justice, but police officers are often not called to account; Anforderungen: Die Schülerin / Der Schüler Kommunikative Textgestaltung [24 P.] richtet seinen Text konsequent und explizit im Sinne der Aufgabenstellung auf die Intention und den Adressaten aus. 2 beachtet die Textsortenmerkmale der jeweils geforderten Zieltextformate. 1 3 erstellt einen sachgerecht strukturierten Text. 4 gestaltet seinen Text hinreichend ausführlich, aber ohne unnötige Wiederholungen und Umständlichkeiten. 5 belegt seine Aussagen durch eine funktionale Verwendung von Verweisen und Zitaten. Ausdrucksvermögen / Verfügbarkeit sprachlicher Mittel [24 P.] 6 löst sich vom Wortlaut des Ausgangstextes und formuliert eigenständig. 7 verwendet funktional einen sachlich wie stilistisch angemessenen und differenzierten allgemeinen und thematischen Wortschatz. 8 verwendet funktional einen sachlich wie stilistisch angemessenen und differenzierten Funktions- und Interpretationswortschatz. 9 verwendet einen variablen und dem jeweiligen Zieltextformat angemessenen Satzbau. Sprachrichtigkeit [24 P.] 7 Wortschatz 8 Grammatik 9 Orthographie (Rechtschreibung und Zeichensetzung) SUMME SPRACHE Gesamtpunktzahl Klausurteil B - Schreiben mit Leseverstehen GESAMTPUNKTZAHL KLAUSUR (SUMME A+B) GESAMTNOTE* 6 Datum und Paraphe: 5 maximale erreichte. Punktzahl Punkte 5 5 3 5 6 16 48 2 01 5 8 9 9 6 72 120 150 ausreichend plus i 9 27 MMN 3 5 3 2 1 4 3 3 4 3 4 4 39 66 76 (4+) 15/11/20